I was out cold, my mouth was numb and
there was a light in my eyes. The light was so bright it was like being an
astronaut working for N.A.S.A. floating right next to the sun. I could hear
banging, like a contractor smashing the concrete with a sledgehammer. Coming
from the light there were magical ponies flying through the sky and fairies
sprinkling their fairy dust on to my tongue. Suddenly there was this weird mint
flavor and I heard a strange voice. I woke up from a dream and there I was in a
dentist chair with this bright light in my eyes.
I love this one. Keep up the good work.
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ReplyDeleteI love the creativity you used
ReplyDeleteI love you jerrad
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ReplyDeleteI loved when you said there were magical ponies flying through the sky.
ReplyDeleteYour writing is spectacular - you use great vocabulary and similes to help the reader visualize and sense what the character is feeling. The ending is a surprise and yet so perfect! The taste of mint is a great connection to the reality of the dentist's office.
ReplyDeleteWell done!
Thankyou
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